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Inspiration,  Lyrics,  Writing

lyrics. lyrics lyrics lyrics.

i tell you, they are one of the biggest obstacles that i face. but i think honestly, i haven’t worked hard enough in this area. i do believe that there are very poetic people in this world, and sentence-forming is something that comes not just naturally but smoothly to them! it’s a bit unfair, but then again, we all have our strengths. and our weaknesses, and i think for me this is one of them! so i thought i’d do some thinking out loud, well, type as i think, and go over some lyrics of who i think really have the gift of the gab-in-song.

 

brooke

 

firstly would be brooke fraser. now if ever you need a menial task to sound romantic, ask brooke. these are the lyrics to her song ‘sailboats'(which is hardly menial, but a real love song) off her ablum FLAGS.

We’re adrift on a sailboat,
My love is the sea.
Yours is the horizon, constant and steady.

You set my limbs locked hard afloat,
Lifted my lonesome sail.

The tide is out, the moon is high,
We’re sailing.

Darling you love is healing,
It makes the bitter sweet.
Warms the winter to spring again, secures the cold’s defeat.
We’re cutting anchor, casting out,
In to the glorious deep.

The tide is out, the moon is high,
We’re sailing.

When we’ve succumb to decrepitude.
Still our love will remain in it’s youth.

The tide is out, the moon is high,
We’re sailing.We’re sailing. We’re sailing.

after reading through i’ve kind of thought to myself, the lyrics are not as striking as when they’re backed by her beautiful tone and tasteful melody. however there are a few things, that really, i just would not think to do. firstly i think my best friend could be a thesaurus. succumb isn’t a word i find in my daily vocabulary, and i actually had to look up what decrepitude meant. the way you form the line is just so crutial! for example when we’ve succumb to decrepitude. could also be said as, when we give in to feeling weak. mmm. i also don’t think it’s very often that we hear a really good metaphor in a song without it sounding way too cheesy. and let’s be honest, describing your love as an ocean has definitely been overdone, yet brooke brings a freshness to it and a real classiness so that you imagine yourself on a sailboat! i don’t know, perhaps my judgment would have been different had i not heard the song before really inspecting the lyrics?

i guess my main point in all of this, is just how much i need to develop my lyrics. it is possible to rhyme without sounding like dr seuss! often when i write, i find myself getting stuck in a bit of a rut! i just need one more line to finish the phrase, yet nothing is natural nothing is flowing so i make up some ridiculous cliche line that we have all heard a thousand times, and instead of revising the song a week later, (with a thesaurus!) i deem that song as no good. i’m going to stop that.

anyway, have a listen to this beautiful song here, and appreciate it as the whole package!

i’ll be back with another lyrical genius soon.

dan xx